Wound represents change in
relationship (He) Can heal in time like
our relationship (She) Permanent
reminder of scar from wound.
Hair -
(He) Cutting hair, feeling different but
it grows back like their love
(She) Cutting hair, grows back
but slowly. Changes occur//like
relationship
Raging storm
Represents aggression//anger from
argument? Damaging of love but
storm passes and love returns
(She) Storm still
leaves damage. Love
is damaged.
Tree
Forever dead. Just like their love.
LAYOUT
Read in 2 ways
Reading Down
Less contrast
Doesn't sound like argument
Reading across
She says
opposite to He.
Each column shows
opposite of argument
LANGUAGE
Uses 'he said' 'she said'
more personal to writer
In the past
TECHNIQUES
Caesura's
Turning points in relationship
Enjambment
Continuation, slow process of love
Overall
He wants to mend relationship
She doesn't want to mend relationship
He is an optimist
She is a pesismist
KISSING
LAYOUT
2 sections
Young people
Middle aged people
No rhyming scheme.
IMAGERY
Young people Stanza 1
Riverbank - journey of the young couple
Pretending to be looking at waterlilies - floating
above water - young love is free - Absorbed in themselves
Nest of some kind - Start of a new life - New relationship
Mouth to mouth - kissing bringing life
Thier River - Their own course, own little world
Clamped together
Selfish love
Metaphor for strength in love
Courteous Detours - Politely averting eyes,
leaving them with their privacy
Middle ages people Stanza 2
Back of taxis, privacy from everyone else, not in public
Mouths and tongues, sense of disgust,
more intimate relationship
Soft and powerful and as moist
as ever, contrasting soft with
moist and powerful, soft -
women, powerful - men
Drawing attention to love. Kissing
for life. Still the same passion as
teenagers
Locked so tightly, Can be undone with a key, not as
permanent as young peoples clamped.
Together that it hurts, Sense of
pain from 2 people brings them
together.
Leaves marks, physical and
emotional marks
Airports and Taxis, saying goodbye,
going towards an end
They too may have futures, May - not
definite. Could die soon making most
of time left
Not in inside each others clothes (because of the
driver), Extra info, humourous - sense of control
OVERALL
Older people are consious about
their surroudings and are more
rushed.
Old people are still very intimate, also clamp together
Younger people have a future
They have all the time in the world
ONE FLESH
Stanza 1
Seperate beds
No longer loving anymore,
marriage drawn apart. gap
between bed.
He with a book, keeping light on late
light on in hope of intimacy
The book he holds unread
Not concentrating on book, secretly wants
his wife, doesnt want to express it
Religious - book is a bible, being unfaithful by
not reading
She like a girl dreaming of childhood
kithinng about her prince charming, fantasising
about relationship
Her eyes fixed on the shadows overhead
Shadows - darkness and mystery. of what
relationship will turn out to be
Fixed - Mind preoccupied on other thoughts
All men elsewhere
everyone else is ignored. waiting for something to relight
the spark in relationship
Stanza 2
Tossed up like flotsam
Relationship is a wreckage, feelings
tossed (sense of not caring)
Imagery of beds floating away. Not
trying to stop it
Movement of drifting away
How cool they lie
Being cold in a physical sense - not together
Lying to each other - they really want to be
together
They hardly ever touch
Releasing what they are holding back
Chastity faces them, a destination
for which their whole lives were a
preparation
Not having sex. Preparing for this
moment, they knew their love would fade
away
Stanza 3
Strangely apart, yet strangely
close together
Metaphorically apart. They want to be together but they each
don't want to be first ones to aproach
Silence between them is like a thread
to hold
Thread is very delicate. Their silence can easily be broken but
they dont want to break it
And time itself's a feather
Feathers are very delicate but people don't take
notice - always scattered on floor by birds. Their time
is fading they just dont realise
Whose fire from which i came, has now grown cold
Their love did used to have a spark but this faded
away.
Coldness is relationship might be permanent
because time is fading slowly
SONG FOR LAST YEAR'S WIFE.
Language
Semanitc fields of winter, frozen and cold. Winter for
him is a negative reflection and he has no one
Structure
Use of enjambment has a message. First line. Before
line brakes, its a start of a new life without Alice.
Dramatic monologue. 25 lines from one reader. No
rhyme scheme showing confusion and that there is
no rhythm in his life.
Imagery - Winter and Isolation. Hardness and loneliness he feels.
I send out my spies to discover what you are doing
Hint of obbsession, Alice might have moved on but he is still watching over her.
Spies suggests that he still watches over his ex wife.
as warm and inviting as when they knew you first...
ellipsis might suggest that he doesnt like what the spies have said and he
doesnt like the idea of Alice being happy without him
same empty gardens exist
Connotate his feelings of empitness from not being with Alice.
Repetition of you suggests speakers longing for 'Alice'
Short sentences might be because of anger
PITY ME NOT BECAUSE THE LIGHT OF DAY
Sonnet is tradtionally about love. Use of
Iamic and strict rhyme gives poem
rhythm and makes love seem natual
Pity me not - suggests strength and determination
Pity me - changes tone of poem - wanfs pity
Cyclical forces of nature
04/01/07
LINES TO MY GRANDFATHERS
Structure - Poem split into 4 parts - Wilkinson , Harrison, Horner and all grandfathers
Wilkinson - Farmer. Ploughed parallel as print -
suggests that he left lines in history and there is a
story there.
Harrison - Publican. Unfavourable light. Self loving - sarcastic tone. Job got him
into trouble, but he may have been a heavy drinker. 'Knuckled duster' and 'just in
case' might mean he needed protection.
Horner - Called 'Grampa' sense of closeness compared to
the rest. 'He cobbled all our boots' suggsts that he was
caring and loved. Might have been quite violent 'pulp and
sqaushed it falt'
Follows a strict rhyme which suggests that his
Grandfathers were looked up to and provided
order.